It's interesting how my perspective of this very short (and what i thought uncontroversial) verse meant to me at my time of writing it. More often than not I am the siren in red.. (haha) and in my mind I was trying to reach into the perspective of what it feels to be veiled.
**
Though I still stand by what I wrote , I will be more aware of this as I try and develop my writing. I must also thank you for reminding me of why I am passionate about art. Your words are heartfelt and I am humbled that you pointed this out to me.
I also find it sad that this world has become so full of hate, anger, and prejudice that even art must be conscious of being politically correct.
Dear Carrie , Further to what i posted before , please send mail to the following person and she will help you;[email protected] Good luck , Aunt polly
Thank you so much! Thank you! I've been wishing for that !:) I hope they allow me to join..although I have no way of getting in touch with them. Would you know anyone I could get in touch with? In case you feel wary about posting a number or email add..my personal email is [email protected]
Wish me luck...i'll search for them online as well and hopefully I can get in touch with one of them.....
i think your poem is really good and very emotional.
I think you are a very thinking and philosophical person or you could not have done it so well.
Do you know that there is a group called the Doha Writers club which meets every Tuesday and they read and critique each others' works ?
Why dont' you get in touch with them and they will let you know where to meet them and then you can get to read your efforts to a very discerning group ?
you're right about poetry being able to bring people together. I agree wholeheartedly! I appreciate your comments because the truth is that all art is human. Hence it is supposed to be biased or else i would be trying to sound like someone i'm not. Because it is biased it brings people together when it makes you think and comment..whether it be negative or positive. That's why i wish i could join/start a writing workshop (short stories and poems) here in doha.
I have written alot of different things and looking at my past work..alot of it contradicts each other because my poetry changes as my perspective of the world changes.
The poetry i write now as a 22 yr old will certainly be different from the poetry I will write at 50. In the same manner..it is only through feedback that any artist can grow. I love to read the works of other people...
and I appreciate how Eco Savvy lifted an idea from what I wrote and created something different on its own....
..between words and lines...it was posted wrong... :
Veiled in black
she felt more woman
In her secrets
than the siren in red
whose skin spills like cream on concrete
btw...I'm surprised people commented on this post at all! it's hardly anything really....makes me think that there are alot of people out there interested in learning more about poetry?
I don't know anything myself..which is why i would also like to learn from other people...
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I don't get the skin on concrete bit..wtf does that mean?
Thank you! I just sent her an email and now await her response.
Holding my breath till then .. ;)
Alexa,
It's interesting how my perspective of this very short (and what i thought uncontroversial) verse meant to me at my time of writing it. More often than not I am the siren in red.. (haha) and in my mind I was trying to reach into the perspective of what it feels to be veiled.
**
Though I still stand by what I wrote , I will be more aware of this as I try and develop my writing. I must also thank you for reminding me of why I am passionate about art. Your words are heartfelt and I am humbled that you pointed this out to me.
I also find it sad that this world has become so full of hate, anger, and prejudice that even art must be conscious of being politically correct.
-carrie
Dear Carrie , Further to what i posted before , please send mail to the following person and she will help you;[email protected] Good luck , Aunt polly
Dear Carrie,
i am new to QL, but when i saw your post , i just felt ihad to put in a few words.
this group usually meets every Tuesday evening , i think at 7 pm at some coffee shop in Center point mall.
i will try to send their email to you.
Please do not stop writing whatever you feel and when it becomes a sizeable amount , you could get it published.
Do not feel inhibited about making your efforts public.
Lots of love ,
Aunt polly
Aunt Polly
Aunt Polly!
Thank you so much! Thank you! I've been wishing for that !:) I hope they allow me to join..although I have no way of getting in touch with them. Would you know anyone I could get in touch with? In case you feel wary about posting a number or email add..my personal email is [email protected]
Wish me luck...i'll search for them online as well and hopefully I can get in touch with one of them.....
happily
-carrie
Aunt Polly
Carrie ,
i think your poem is really good and very emotional.
I think you are a very thinking and philosophical person or you could not have done it so well.
Do you know that there is a group called the Doha Writers club which meets every Tuesday and they read and critique each others' works ?
Why dont' you get in touch with them and they will let you know where to meet them and then you can get to read your efforts to a very discerning group ?
keep up the good work.
Aunt Polly
you're right about poetry being able to bring people together. I agree wholeheartedly! I appreciate your comments because the truth is that all art is human. Hence it is supposed to be biased or else i would be trying to sound like someone i'm not. Because it is biased it brings people together when it makes you think and comment..whether it be negative or positive. That's why i wish i could join/start a writing workshop (short stories and poems) here in doha.
I have written alot of different things and looking at my past work..alot of it contradicts each other because my poetry changes as my perspective of the world changes.
The poetry i write now as a 22 yr old will certainly be different from the poetry I will write at 50. In the same manner..it is only through feedback that any artist can grow. I love to read the works of other people...
and I appreciate how Eco Savvy lifted an idea from what I wrote and created something different on its own....
:)
you are good at this...
too bad Alexa does not think so...
It just means that a lot of people have nothing else to do.
"Life is like a bicycle, if it's too easy - you're probably going down :)"
Wealth wears white
And renders us blind
To freedom in the shadows
Of a spotless mind
This dainty desert thrives
Ferraris and Porch’s a common sight
& while the world eats of terror and loss
bombs don’t sound in this land of posh
Your a good poet!
covered in all black,
she is a hidden treasure of the sea
much safer than a revealing siren,
like honey's invitation to a bee
..between words and lines...it was posted wrong... :
Veiled in black
she felt more woman
In her secrets
than the siren in red
whose skin spills like cream on concrete
btw...I'm surprised people commented on this post at all! it's hardly anything really....makes me think that there are alot of people out there interested in learning more about poetry?
I don't know anything myself..which is why i would also like to learn from other people...
what are spaces I forgot all bout literature
was for my last post...
and yes Eco Savvy
...I am impressed ;)
there should have been spaces ...
just tryin to impress Carrie so that I learn something from him
but a personal reflection..
although your comment got me thinking that it would have been much better if:
Veiled in black she felt more womanIn her secretsthan the siren in redwhose skin spills like cream on concrete
Veiled in black
she is hidden treasure of dead sea
than the siren in red
whose skin peels
are like snake shedding.........bla blah
like cream on concrete...
interesting...
oh ok...
was wondering that too hashin..
oh..from a collection of short sketches(poems) i'm writing :D
verse from where?